We can dress a swan in pig’s clothes and dress a pig in swan’s clothes, the heart remembers what it wants to. I would rather have one reader who remembers the point and thus seeks the truth than a thousand who remember the good form and thus learned nothing.
You’re certainly well versed on the business side of things, and I duly appreciate your advice. But as long as the point is not lost on my dear sisters, I’ve earned my wages, spiritually speaking.
Not lost. Somewhat obscured by its length. I'm thinking an edit toward something like Aesop's fables in length would make it more pithy and memorable. Or, conversely, make it into a film length narrative, with two very pretty girls in the leading roles, ensuring more than the art house crowd might pay to see it. Best of luck. Narrative fiction can be hard to carry off.
I will have to go back and read the earlier parts to this. Very though provoking!
Thank you, please do.
I remember. Thanks for revisiting.
Thanks for participating.
Interesting, if maybe a bit disjointed? Might do well as a screenplay.
We can dress a swan in pig’s clothes and dress a pig in swan’s clothes, the heart remembers what it wants to. I would rather have one reader who remembers the point and thus seeks the truth than a thousand who remember the good form and thus learned nothing.
Point taken.
Thanks again for reaching out.
You’re certainly well versed on the business side of things, and I duly appreciate your advice. But as long as the point is not lost on my dear sisters, I’ve earned my wages, spiritually speaking.
Not so much business as the number of viewers or readers you reach. Isn't that part of your aim?
It’s more like a long parable than a short story, but point received. Hopefully the point of it is not lost.
Not lost. Somewhat obscured by its length. I'm thinking an edit toward something like Aesop's fables in length would make it more pithy and memorable. Or, conversely, make it into a film length narrative, with two very pretty girls in the leading roles, ensuring more than the art house crowd might pay to see it. Best of luck. Narrative fiction can be hard to carry off.